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You communed with flowers
In an alternate dimension
Outside the bedroom door
Whose oppressive squares
Held me in place while
You passed through easily

Hours went by
Or maybe only days
While two cellmates
Spoke of the heavens
And with every exhale
The colors danced
The walls sighed

You returned to us
As easily as you left
We were awestruck again
And stirred slightly
You recounted your communion
The flowers imparted upon you

“Every day we are losing more stars”

Date: 2024-09-22 03:52 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] muchtooarrogant
To me, this felt like two parents captured by their everyday life, and their offspring who goes wandering but always returns.

Dan

Date: 2024-09-22 04:37 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] reidharriscooper
No way out but through the faith you have, no matter the strength or lack of conviction.

Date: 2024-09-22 11:38 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] adoptedwriter
Bittersweet. Lovely!

Date: 2024-09-23 03:26 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] erulissedances
Oh dear, that's rather sad.

- Erulisse (one L)

Date: 2024-09-23 05:51 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] swirlsofpurple
Haunting and beautiful

Date: 2024-09-24 07:29 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] halfshellvenus
I liked the final line a lot-- it has a complete different feeling because of the context of the overall poem. And it does seem like a poem of loss, of precious things disappearing and most people not even fully appreciating them for what they were.

Date: 2024-09-24 09:30 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] rayaso
This was beautiful. I liked the ending. This kind of bittersweet mood is hard to create. Great job.

Date: 2024-09-25 11:28 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] murielle
Something elusive, ethereal. As always beautiful and thought provoking.

Date: 2024-09-26 02:37 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] fausts_dream
Poetry, for me, is boiling things down to the essential.

This poem is essential.

Well done.

Date: 2024-09-26 04:18 pm (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] xeena
The emotion in this is fantastic. I love how you can say so much with so few words

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